8thdayfiction

…and on the 8th day, micro fiction was published on some dude's blog.

Dickie

A couple of years ago, a stranger pulled into the vacant lot on the other side of town, driving a beat-up pickup truck that was pulling a shiny vintage Airstream aluminum trailer behind it.

The mystery man rarely set foot outside his trailer and identified himself only as “Dickie”.

Sure enough, rumors pretty quickly started spreading around town, especially once word got out that Dickie was claiming he could grant one wish to anyone who’d step inside his trailer. A lot of people thought he was crazy, or a pedophile on the lam, or both.

But a few curious people did take him up on his offer, and, strangely, the majority of those brave few were subsequently seen about town wearing new overalls after their meetings.

Well, to make a long story short, the mystery man wasn’t a pedophile, and he wasn’t crazy. And he wasn’t a genie or wizard or what-have-you, either. Turns out, he was just a traveling sales rep for Dickies Clothing, and the “grant you one wish” claim was just his strategy for getting people one-on-one so he could deliver his sales pitch to them.

But we never did figure out how he was able to give Blake Ingersoll the power of invisibility.

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4 thoughts on “Dickie

  1. Ok, I’m glad I’m not the only one who’s ever thought “Dickies” is about the worst name for clothing ever, and ripe for the creation of shady characters. It’s like they created the name back when people didn’t know what the middle finger meant either.

    When you reference the “grant you one wish” claim at the end of the story, it almost had the assumption that we knew what you meant, when it hadn’t actually been said before. Just wondering if it would be good to add that part in the initial description in paragraphs one and two to add to the shadiness of Dickie before we get the reveal at the end. BUT IT’S ONLY AN IDEA, I LOVE YOUR WRITING, HAHA, PEACE LOVE AND ALL THAT.

    • The “grant you one wish” claim is actually mentioned in the third paragraph, when it mentions that rumors quickly started spreading around town about the guy, and that this was one of the reasons why.

      However, having written that, I would not disagree at all that it probably could’ve been written more clearly. This was one of the stories I’ve done that went through more editing and revising than some of the others, and I’m still not 100% happy with how it turned out. I don’t think it’s a muddled mess (like the first draft was), but it could’ve been clearer for sure.

      But that’s part of the process: It’s a challenge to do stuff on such a tight schedule, and some of them will turn out better and/or be easier to write than others. And I always appreciate feedback, positive or negative or a “just a suggestion but I like your writing” in-between. Thanks again for reading and commenting!

  2. Oh, der–I don’t know how I missed that. I’ll chalk it up to the cadbury egg coma I was experiencing last night.

    I can’t even imagine producing a piece of fiction every day! It’s hard for me to even read one every day, which is why I end up commenting on like 7 at once. I totally salute you! Like. TOTALLY,

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